You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be take directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. Write a letter to the bank. Explain what has happened and say what you would like them to do about it.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to complain that I will be charged $70 from my
bank
account
which is wrong and it is unbelievable to me. I have
an
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bank
for more than 6 years. And
every thing
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goes well until I got a notice from my
bank
saying that I will be charged $70 because I have overdrawn 240 dollars from my
bank
account
. Of course, I didn’t overuse any money from my
account
as I am a trustworthy man, and I always put money in my
account
before I purchase something. I hope that you can find some bugs
from
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the system, If something goes wrong,
such
as
wrong
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person
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phone number, would you please send me a letter again and explain
that
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reason.
Also
, if the charge will happen in the future, please remove the scheme from my
further
payment. Thank you for your attention regarding
this
problem. Please contact me on my mobile phone
049006429
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if you have
further
questions. Yours faithfully, Cole Chen
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