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Plastic bags are used widely and cause many environmental problems. Some people say they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Plastic
bags
 are
cozy
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 and cheap and can be seen everywhere in our daily life
however
 no one thinks about causing great damage to nature. More people prefer paper
bags
than
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to
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plastic
bags
.Personally speaking, I completely agree with
this
 idea due to 2 main reasons °On the one hand, when we burn
plastic
bags
 it brings some chemical pollution into the air. It can cause a lot of damage to the respiratory tract and nerve
fibers
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 of many people.
Plastic
bags
 are non-biodegradable and
therefore
 they would deteriorate our soil and Air. When we bury
plastic
bags
 in the ground, which damages and pollutes the health of
soil
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the soil
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, resulting in soil erosion. °On top of that, the
second
 many wild animals may die from accidentally eating
plastic
 debris.
This
 is more likely to be seen with marine animals. Some human induces activities
such
 as sailing
allow
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 people to have opportunities to drop litter in the ocean and again,
many
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much
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 of
trash
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the trash
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 is made of
plastic
.
For instance
,
therefore
, many rare marine animals are dying out. In conclusion:
plastic
bags
 play important role in our life
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, therefore,
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therefore
 I'm in
favor
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favour
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 of replacing them with paper
bags
 as soon as possible
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