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In the future, nobody will buy products newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Owing to the burgeoning technology
people
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 like to read and listen
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books
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to books
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 through online applications. It is believed by
somepeople
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some people
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print
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that print
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media
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no
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 longer available in the market
while
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 online
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 will be
poplar
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popular
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 because of free of cost. I partially
agree
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this
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 statement and in the subsequent fragments. I will discuss why. Irrefutably, there are a plethora of grounds
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why I agree with
this
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 statement but the vital two are
audio
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audiobooks
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books
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as well as
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free
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a free
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subscription
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subscriptions
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. To commence with, the former view, in the coming years
people
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 will like to
listen
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listen to
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 audio
books
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 rather than hard copies.
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they would have internet facilities and mobile
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phones
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;
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consequently
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consequently,
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 one will read and listen
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books
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to books
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 and
newspapers
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.
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, If Google
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podcasts
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had
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were
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 not popular,
then
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people
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 would not read
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the text
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 along audio
clips
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 facilities. Another reason is that
,
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people
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 can free subscribe any time and take some benefits.
People
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 cannot only read digital
books
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 but
also
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 they can take notes and
they
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apply
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can
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check which book is good to listen
or
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 not, thereby, they will
also
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give
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have
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facility
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the facility
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 anytime unscribe.
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, despite its beneficial
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side,
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 its
darkside
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dark side
 cannot be neglected as
olderpeople
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older people
 like to read
books
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 and develop better concentration.
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, most of the older
people
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 used to read hard
copy
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copies
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 of
newspapers
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 and
books
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.
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 is the reason, elder
people
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 have
habit
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a habit
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to read
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of reading
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a newspaper
the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 at 7am without any
distraction
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distractions
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,
therefore
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 they cannot like digital
newspapers
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.
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, digital
newspapers
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 are
delying
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being
upload
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in
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to
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website
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websites
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 so that
people
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 have nature to read in the early morning.
Secondly
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,
people
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 want to develop better concentration.
Due to
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technology
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technology,
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people
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 have a lot of work and distraction, so
that
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apply
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they need to read
print
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media
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 to develop concentration
as well as
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 better mental health. In conclusion, many
people
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 think that online
media
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 will become famous and
print
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media
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 will
be vanished
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vanish
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 but if
people
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 read
print
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books
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,
then
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 they
would be improved
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will improve
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 better mental ability and enhance
knowledge
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their knowledge
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.

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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical sequence of ideas by clearly linking each paragraph to the previous one for better coherence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each main point is thoroughly supported with relevant examples and explanations.
task achievement
Try to maintain a balanced argument throughout, addressing both sides of the topic more equally.
task achievement
Clarify and elaborate on ideas to ensure they are comprehensive and coherent.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the topic and presenting a summary of the views.
coherence cohesion
The argument is well-structured, with distinct points discussed in separate paragraphs.
task achievement
Inclusion of relevant examples, such as Google podcast, strengthens the argument by providing real-world contexts.
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