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Parents are the best teachers. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #teachers
In
children
's lives,
parents
 have a great role as the best instructor It is popularly believed by many individuals that
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children
childiren
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children
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parents
 are their
first
 and most experienced teachers because
parents
 start educating their
children
some
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 commodities from birth. Take an example, to be polite,
to
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talk,
to
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walk, etc. In my opinion
that
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the responsibility of
parents
 is bigger and more difficult than that of teachers.
In addition
 to that real professors can not teach
children
 some of the things they need to learn, because the beginning of knowledge and education begins with the family, with the
parents
. Fathers and mothers have an important role in
children
's education and manners. On other hand,
parents
 cannot teach every subject as well as
expert
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 couches.
For instance
, they can teach, but they are not able to give knowledge in a deep sense
besides
,
parents
 cannot teach some information with teacher-like patience because the educator deal with each child individually and teach them what they do not know with perseverance.
As an
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 example of
this
 is the period when the COVID-19 virus spread. At that time, students could not go to school during the quarantine, and the responsibility of educating them fell on the
parents
. At that time, many people understood that teachers are able to be patient and responsible In conclusion, from my point of view, it is more important for
parents
 to teach their
children
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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