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Nowadays many colleges and universities are offering online courses for students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#colleges #universities #courses #students
Nowadays, Learning is the base of development of students which is divided into many types, online
courses
 or in the classroom up to their institution. some people
believed
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 that studying online
courses
 can boost the performance of children
while
 some
argued
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 that universities and schools should plan cultivation in other ways. I completely mention that other learnings have pros outweigh the cons. On the one hand, education has changed more than before which makes colleges and universities adapt to following the new normal by studying online. maybe some people can not rely on the new system
also
 there are many problems
according to
 individual reasons.
for example
, seeing on the screen and sitting for a long time is unhealthy for the eyes and
bones
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 joints.
Moreover
,
while
 studying sometimes students can not concentrate on their work because no one looking for them all, so they do other activities
during
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 the teacher is explaining .
therefore
, online
courses
 are not good for part of children.
On the other hand
, online
courses
 have advantages in many cases which encourage children to choose
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their favourites
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favourites
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courses
 and peaceful than outside studying.
for instance
, many
peoples
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people
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 want more meditation to focus on their work in different forms in the classroom.
Besides
, the place has an effect on learning, in some cases, they do not like the atmosphere in class something studying in the cafe is better.
Thus
, Studying alone makes the person introverted and ultimately lose the confidence to stand in front of other people. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying online classes are advantageous for those who cannot attend school
due to
 non-availability of transport
facility
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, or having family problems,
whereas
 in
a
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the
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 long
race
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 it is not beneficial as it shatters
person's
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a person's
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 confidence in future
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