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Unemployment is a growing problem all over the world. What are the causes of this? What could be done to help tackle this issue? To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Getting no
job
 is a growing problem all over the world.As far as my opinion is concerned, I fully agree with the statement because it is one of the major problems of the world.
To begin
 with,
people
 who have done hard
work
 in studies to get a good
job
although
 they don'
t
 get a
job
 because there is no merit at all for getting a
job
.
People
 who have their parents or relatives at higher posts their children get a
job
 because their parents or relatives give orders to that
government
 officer.
For example
: In Pakistan youngsters who
work
 hard for getting a good
job
instead
 of those
people
 who have their parents or relatives at a higher rank give orders and their kids get a
job
. That's not fair to the students and
then
 if they don'
t
 get a
job
 they fall into depression and anxiety because they have done very hard
work
 in studies and getting graduation they don'
t
 get a
job
.
On the other hand
, there are many solutions to
this
 problem but the main solution is that there should be merit to getting a
job
 and the
government
 should make a law where they order
people
 who are in higher posts do not involve in
this
 because of them youngsters who done hard
work
 don'
t
 get justice after
this
 law there will be justice and there will be merit on every
government
job
. To conclude my essay I must say that,there should be justice and there should not be cheating in jobs and the
government
 should see that case
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