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You know the information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. Describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate

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information
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the labor
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 market for 6 different countries in 1995 and 2005.
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First
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 of all, the main feature is that for all those counties the rate of male employees is higher
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 female.
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, we can notice the growing trend for male staff in each of those lands. In 1995 it was from 55% to 70% of male and in comparison to 2005, it was from 68% to 84%.
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,
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 rate of employment was constantly lower in all countries in 1995 and in 2005 too.
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, here we can evaluate the growing trend of female employment
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. In 1995 it was from 25% to 55%, in opposite to 2005's rate it was from 38% to 68%. To sum up, It seems that
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Switzerland
 and UK were
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 progressive countries in female hiring. After
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 were USA and Iceland. And Australia with New
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 on the bottom in female employment.
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