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In the last decade, there has been a great increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults. This has been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, however, other students see these courses as less effective than classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

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 been gaining popularity throughout recent years. There have been more and more
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various kinds of online courses available to
people
. While some view these as valuable chances, some tend to have reservations relating to these courses. In the following paragraphs, the pros and cons of getting these classes would be discussed in
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People
 in decades ago might be hard to imagine they could join a
class
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miles away from the schools.
This
 indeed is possible nowadays by going into a virtual classroom
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 just sitting at home. There is no doubt that virtual learning removes all the geographical
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 prevailing in the old days.
For instance
, Asian
people
 could currently attend a virtual lesson which is organised by a European education institution. Not only the venue of an online
class
 could be arranged without locational limitation,
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time
 for attending
such
 could
also
 be very flexible.
For example
, in previous days, if certain employees rush into the crowded traffic in hope that they will not be late as the
class
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half an hour after their official off-
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, left alone they may need to work
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extra hours from
time
 to
time
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However
, due to the development of
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technology, they are able to pick a coffee shop nearby their offices so that they can attend the virtual
class
 on
time
 easily. For some classes, videos are
also
 uploaded to the internet platform so that
people
 can visit at their earliest convenience. While there are a couple of advantages as mentioned above, having virtual classes sometime might deprive
people
 of opportunities to interact and discuss with others.
For example
, in a real classroom context,
people
 are more convenient to have face-to-face in-depth discussions with
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others with instant responses.
This
 in fact is an essential element for many
people
 to understand knowledge more comprehensively through talking and listening.
On the other hand
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studying
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studying
 in a virtual classroom might bring some
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 issues to somebodies as they may be off-tracked if they
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 at home. Overall, there are always arguments on both sides as to whether it is more beneficial of studying
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 the traditional way or trying some brand new way like taking
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 virtual lesson. Choosing which kinds would always depend on your needs and circumstances.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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