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1.Global warming is now generally agreed to be a very serious problem. What are the causes of global warming and what should governments do to reduce it.

There is no doubt that the recent changes in
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 climate, and the
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 temperatures affected all the ecological systems of our planet.
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,
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 there are some reasons behind that catastrophic disaster, authorities can take some actions to control the situation. The main cause of global warming is the excessive amounts of greenhouse gases produced by different industrial sectors. These
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 contributed to
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 in the
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 temperature in the past five decades
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 at least 3 degrees Celsius.
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, CO2 produced by factories or even vehicles is accumulated above the
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 and
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 the reflected sunlight
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 to space.
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, the industrial revolution led to the deforestation of massive
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. The trees are the lung that absorbs unwanted carbon dioxide and cleans the air. Eventually, the world is becoming warmer, and the weather conditions are totally unexpected. Various possible actions could be taken by the governments to find solutions to reduce the
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effects.
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 with, introducing more laws and regulations related to controlling industrial air pollution.
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, most European countries signed an international weather agreement that regulates the production of harmful chemicals released by the factories
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 lead to global warming.
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 to that, governments should support
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 of renewable energy
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 of current sources
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 as fossil fuels and coal because of their devastating impacts on the atmosphere.
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, several factors led to the global warming issue.
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, the authorities can apply some laws and regulations,
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 using other clean energy
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 to reduce
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 issue.

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task achievement
Your introduction is good, but it could be clearer about what you will discuss. Make sure to state all main points at the start.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer links between your ideas. Try connecting sentences more strongly to help the flow of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, briefly restate the main points clearly to strengthen your ending.
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Make sure to explain how the laws you mention can specifically help. This adds strength to your arguments.
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You provided relevant examples like CO2 from factories, which helps support your points.
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You discussed multiple causes and solutions for global warming, showing good understanding of the topic.
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