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A poor infrastructure hinders under developed countries from progressing and modernizing. Some people think this should be the first problem tackled by foreign aid. To what extent do you agree?

#infrastructure #countries #people #first #aid
Poverty striven
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 countries struggle to tilt toward
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development
develoment
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development
 by effectively utilizing the foreign funds they receive. Some argue that
these money
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 should be mainly invested in establishing and improving infrastructure, while others believe in utilising it for other needs. In my point of view, I agree with the former view. Investing
on
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 building up physical resources,
such
 as
,
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 schools, hospitals,
transportation
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and transportation
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 systems has many advantages.
Firstly
, It would improve the quality of life citizens live
in
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.
For example
, many chronic diseases patients suffer from staying at home, can be treated in hospitals.
In addition
, it would relieve the burden on the family of looking after a sick member.
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, having physical resources would free
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people to work effectively toward development.
Furthermore
, the assets are sustainable and would serve many generations to come.
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, the
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of
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 using funds for the
above mentioned
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,
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 is due to the fact that a group of natives
not
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 been able to provide even for their basic needs. When a component of the country
suffer
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 from hunger and
without
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 access to clean water, can the use of aid to
develop
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 physical resources
justified
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? To be ethical all
country men
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countrymen
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 and women should be provided
for
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the
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basic needs before thinking of other development. In conclusion,foreign funds
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third world
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countries
coutries
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countries
 should be used for sustainable development by improving infrastructure, but at the same time be sensitive
of
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 the fact it shouldn't be
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expense
expensive
expence
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 of a minority suffering, without basic necessities
been
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fulfilled
fullfilled
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fulfilled
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