Some people believe that children should be made disciplined by making them obey rules and do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Others, however, believe that those children who are controlled are not well prepared to tackle the challenges life brings to them. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Discipline plays a pivotal role in everybody's
life
. Some communities believe that offspring should follow rules and regulations in which they improve discipline in their
life
by obeying their
parents
and
teachers
;
However
, there
are
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some
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of people who argue with
this
matter and say that offspring who are controlled by their elders were not able to face the challenges in their future. In
this
essay, I will discuss both
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views and
also
give my opinion on
this
matter with some relevant examples. On the one side, Some communities say that offspring should follow rules and regulations to be
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disciplined
person
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. In some countries,
teachers
and
parents
don't have any
rights
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to punish their offspring; so,
children
are taking
this
thing
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their advantage and not obeying their elders. 1for
this
reason, they kept some rules and regulations they will get disciple in
thier
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their
life
.
For instance
, In the USA,
parents
and
teachers
are not allowed to punish their offspring physically; so they give homework and keep some deadlines to punish them. By following their
parents
and
teachers
,
children
can build their
life
from their
life
lessons.
This
will
also
help offspring to build discipline. On the other side, If
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are controlled by their elders they will not have the ability to handle problems in their
life
.
Parents
restrict their offspring when they spend more time
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playing games and using
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but these activities will help
children
to build their technical skills.
For instance
, By playing games like Candy Crush,
children
will solve manifold levels where they will improve
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and thinking
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. Most
parents
don't encourage their
children
to build their
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in arts but according to
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survey
art
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people are more talented than non-art people. In
this
way, Arts, games, etc help offspring to handle their
life
without problems. To sum up, In my view, I agree with both the statements because both have their own advantages to
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a significant career.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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