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The two maps show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

The two maps show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities
#two #maps #show #island #construction #tourist #facilities
The main features of the
island
that is
 made for
tourist
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tourists
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 are; first and most important the roads and footpath are formed for easiness of
tourist
 either to walk on
footpath
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the footpath
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 or through their vehicles on
roads
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the roads
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.
Then
 after entering
into
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the
island
 there is a reception where people can stay and can think
where
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about where
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 to go either into
a
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accommodation or into
restaurant
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the restaurant
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. Near to the
restaurants
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restaurant's
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 accommodations where
tourist
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tourists
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 can sit and enjoy the weather. The
island
 covers
the
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an
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 area of 100 meters.
Island
 beauty is
more
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enhanced by these dates trees as
provides
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 shade to the
tourist
. The
island
 is abandoned before its construction and
then
this
island
 changes its look from abandoned to more attractive buildings
such
 as
the
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restaurant, accommodations,
and
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roads and
footpath
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footpaths
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 it changed the complete scenario before and after.
In
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On
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 the left side of
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the island
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island
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,island
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 there is a beach where
tourist
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tourists
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 can swim and some
tourist
 families come here to sit on a boat and enjoy the sea creatures and the blue sky.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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