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You are attending a course at an evening school. Write a letter to the director of the school with a complaint about the course. In your letter, you should: – Describe the course you are taking. – Explain what you don’t like about the course. – Give your opinion about what should be done about it.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction with the "Sustainable Crop Management" evening course that I am currently attending at your school. I was assured during the registration process that the curriculum would include practical field visits to local farms.
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 has not been the case. All our lessons have taken place in a standard classroom, and we have focused entirely on historical farming data rather than modern, practical techniques. To make matters worse, I have already sent an email to the Department Head to request more practical sessions, but I have yet to receive a response.
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 has caused me significant inconvenience because I am planning to start a small organic farm next season, and I urgently need the hands-on experience promised in your brochure. At present, I feel the course is not meeting the professional standards required for
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 subject. Under the circumstances, I would like to request either an immediate change to the syllabus to include field work or a full refund of my enrollment fees so that I may find a more suitable program. I look forward to your prompt response regarding
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 matter. Yours faithfully, Davinder Kaur

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coherence
Try to keep one idea in each paragraph.
coherence
Use link words to show how ideas fit.
tone
Be formal and polite when you show you feel bad.
task
Say what you want next with a clear plan and date.
content
The letter tells what the course is and what was told at sign up.
effect
It shows how the issue will affect the writer.
form
It ends with a clear ask and a polite close.
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