The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Throughout the
last
5
decades
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women
have conquered many great obstacles all around the
world
to get to where we are today.
However
, in most places society still has much to go for gender equality. From my point of view,
women
have indeed come a long way, re-earning their rights, but I
also
agree that
women
are still not seen as equal to
men
.
This
essay will discuss how the position of
women
changed in the
world
and will bring a few points to clarify my point of view.
Firstly
, all through history
women
were seen as objects for
men
to use. Girls were raised to be wives, to be good and not to open their mouths. With much protest and hard work from many
women
around the
world
,
this
idea began to
change
and females started to have a life of their own, they can do things that were only allowed for
men
,
such
as having a proper job, driving, choosing not to marry and not to have children, going places for themselves and not for
men
. The things those strong-minded
women
conquered paved the way for many generations to come and continue to do the work until there is equality.
Nevertheless
, as much
change
women
have made throughout those 50 years, getting to speak up and find their place in society, it is clear that most countries still do not consider
men
and
women
as equals, females have to continually fight to be seen and taken as seriously. There is a tv show on Netflix called hierarquia that portrays
this
scenario where a woman works at a law firm with
men
and to be seen as equal to all those
men
, she has to work quadruple as hard. And even
then
, she is still treated differently at the table. From my point of view, it doesn't matter how much
women
try to
change
the
world
and find their place, if
men
don't want to
change
and see
women
as equal, there will always be challenges that
women
have to go through that males never will just to be viewed as the same. In conclusion, females have earned their equal place in society for years, and yet, still have to fight to be seen.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • historical context
  • gender pay gap
  • underrepresentation
  • leadership roles
  • gender-based violence
  • educational opportunities
  • workforce
  • legal reforms
  • statistics
  • case studies
  • global perspective
  • progressive changes
  • cultural differences
  • empowerment
  • patriarchy
  • systemic discrimination
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