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The flow chart describes the various processes that occur from start to end for the manufacturing of finished
pots
. The overall procedure has twelve stages that can be summarized as extracting and preparing the clay, shaping the clay
to
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pot
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 and heating it and
finally
 adding
color
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 to it.
To begin
 with, sand is mined by the extractor and loaded onto huge trucks which transport it to the factory, Once the raw material reaches the factory, it is
then
 crushed into a fine powder by a machine. Once it has become coarse enough, water is added to it and mixed in the same container. After that, the mixture is poured onto concrete moulds to shape it into a pot. The mixture remains in the mould for at least 4-6 hours. In the final stages, the moulded clay
pots
 are transferred into an
industrial sized
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 oven which bakes the
pots
 at
a
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1000 degrees
celcius
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. These baked
pots
 are
colored
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 blue externally by dipping the
pots
 into
blue
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 paint. To make the
color
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 dry, these
pots
 are
finally
 put into the oven once again. Once the
color
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 dry’s
of
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the
pots
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 exterior, we obtain the finished
pots
 for selling
into
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 the market.
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