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Parents are the best teachers. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #teachers
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Some people are of the opinion that most educators are most often mom and
dad
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.
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 essay agrees wholeheartedly that
parents
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 are the best teachers in the world because they prioritize the moral basis and development of
children
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. On the one hand, babies seek
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their
parents
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 for guidance on how to pick up social graces early in life.
Parents
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 teach their
children
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 more about social intelligence as they become older, which aids them
become
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 more suited to live in society.
Parents
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 frequently serve as role models for their offspring.
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,
parents
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 can influence their
children
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's study habits. As an example,
children
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 whose
parents
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 are doctors, lawyers, investors, and other
professions
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 observe their
parents
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 working a lot, reading books, and even at home. By their own actions, they are
modeling
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 for their kids how to study.
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,
parents
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 can
also
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 set a poor example for their
children
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.
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 to finding it challenging to have
a typical formative years
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typical formative years
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,
children
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 of abusive
parents
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 run the risk of growing up to resemble them. In
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 way,
parents
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'
unfavorable
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 influence on
children
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's growth into negative personalities. In conclusion,
parents
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 are the best teachers for their
children
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. They leave big marks on their
children
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's lives and are more influential teachers than any others they may have in their lives.
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