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Parents are the best teachers. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people are of the opinion that most educators are most often mom and
dad
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dads
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.
This
 essay agrees wholeheartedly that
parents
 are the best teachers in the world because they prioritize the moral basis and development of
children
. On the one hand, babies seek
to
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their
parents
 for guidance on how to pick up social graces early in life.
Parents
 teach their
children
 more about social intelligence as they become older, which aids them
become
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 more suited to live in society.
Parents
 frequently serve as role models for their offspring.
In addition
,
parents
 can influence their
children
's study habits. As an example,
children
 whose
parents
 are doctors, lawyers, investors, and other
professions
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 observe their
parents
 working a lot, reading books, and even at home. By their own actions, they are
modeling
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 for their kids how to study.
However
,
parents
 can
also
 set a poor example for their
children
.
In addition
 to finding it challenging to have
a typical formative years
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typical formative years
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,
children
 of abusive
parents
 run the risk of growing up to resemble them. In
this
 way,
parents
'
unfavorable
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 influence on
children
's growth into negative personalities. In conclusion,
parents
 are the best teachers for their
children
. They leave big marks on their
children
's lives and are more influential teachers than any others they may have in their lives.
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