Some people believe it is essential to include physical education classes in the curriculum for all school-age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academics subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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To begin
with, many people
believe that physical education
classes should be included in the school curriculum because regular physical activity provides students
with physical and mental health benefits. For instance
, overweight and obese people
are at high risk of suffering from cardiovascular diseases, and a
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Moreover
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therefore
making young people
happier.
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academics
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, those students
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is that they make students
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