Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether the places of
museums
should entertain people
or only educate
. In Correct pronoun usage
themeducate
this
essay, I will explain both possessions and I am going to tell my belief about this
discussion.
The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that museums
must be amusing
Add an article
an amusing
the amusing
place
where Fix the agreement mistake
places
people
get entertained. First
and most importantly museums
need to make money. To do that their exhibitions can’t be boring. The workers of this
institutions have to figure out how to make their museum stand out from all the others, Correct determiner usage
these
make
it unique to attract visitors. Correct word choice
and make
This
would led
to making bigger profits, which allow Change the verb form
lead
to
Change preposition
for
invest
Replace the word
investment
into
museum facilities Change preposition
in
also
Correct word choice
and also
it
would help raise workers' wages. The Correct pronoun usage
apply
second
reason why museums
should bring joy, and not only educate is that museums
have to be interesting and understandable for people
of all ages, especially for children. Getting young people
to focus on learning is difficult these days. Therefore
, one of the goals of museums
must be to combine education with entertainment and teach children, otherwise
they will simply be bored and uninterested. Add a comma
,otherwise
In contrast
, some others may claim that the only purpose of museums
is to educate human beings. Museums
reveal to us past events or help us understand other world cultures. We have to respect history and other nations, so depicting these things through an entertainment view would not be mature.
Having considered both views, I think museums
need to have balance. I mean it should be enjoyable, entertaining and educational at the same time.Submitted by oimigle on
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