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As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the user should cover the costs. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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 era, everybody has a car and maybe more than one.
Consequently
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, these cars need more
roads
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 and building a new
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 is so expensive
nonetheless
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, in my opinion, the government must give
money
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 for new
roads
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. There are several reasons why we have to spend
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 on new way systems.
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, these days there are a lot of cars and they need more
roads
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.
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, the highways should be straight so we can trip safely and comfortably.
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, in an emergency situation ambulances have to go fastly and safely. Unless the ways are enough good ambulances can not go fastly
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, maybe a patient will die.
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, citizens are paying taxes for the infrastructure services like highways and the authorities have to build new ways.
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, ways are very important for economic activities and improving the economical situation makes
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 is a win-win matter.
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, some people believe that we should not spend
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 on the
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 system. They have some sensible reasons.
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 of building a new highway, we can build more useful buildings like a hospital, a school and a library. The benefits of these things are affecting directly the community and the new generation has grove up wiser. Structuring a new
road
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 takes a long time, work power and
money
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 for
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 reason it is wasting time and
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 for society. Especially developing countries should not prioritise
roads
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 they have the more urgent necessity. In conclusion, the government is held responsible for making new
road
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 systems and I believe that they have to budget allocation for
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 construction
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