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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some that there is no connection between the
news
 and lives of the most
people
 and for most of us reading
newspapers
 and watching
news
 programs are waste of time. I disagree with
this
 statement and as far as I am concerned, having no information about daily
news
 is way
more
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worse and almost everyone should be aware of the
news
. In today's
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fast-paced
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fast paced
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world
, almost everything changes steeply and keeping up with these alterations are crucial for knowing in which directions the
world
 processes go. In terms of
policial
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political
 issues or
finance
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 aspects,
for instance
,
news
 programmes and
newspapers
 have a significant contribution
for
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 the
people
.
Thus
, watching TV
news
 and reading
newaspapers
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newspapers
 regularly make
the
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people
 more conscious and hone their reflections
to
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on
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 what happens in the whole
world
.
On the other hand
, the societies which are unwilling to be informed about what is going on
the
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in the
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 country they live or in the
world
,
they
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consider
this
 as
time wasting
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time-wasting
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;
therefore
, leading countries in the
world
 try to use
this
 as a weakness and
commences
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commence
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 to keep these countries under their control.
Then
, it will bring more boundaries and its cost will not be desirable for
people
 that
has
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have
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 no idea about the
news
. In conclusion, having no connection with
vast
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the vast
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 majority of
people
 and
news
 and
also
, reading
newspapers
 and watching TV
news
 programs are taken as a waste of time by some
people
. I agree with the circumstance that
vast
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 amount of
people
are
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 informed by TV or
newspapers
 and following the happenings.
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