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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some that there is no connection between the
news
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 and lives of the most
people
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 and for most of us reading
newspapers
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 and watching
news
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 programs are waste of time. I disagree with
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 statement and as far as I am concerned, having no information about daily
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 is way
more
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worse and almost everyone should be aware of the
news
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. In today's
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fast-paced
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fast paced
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world
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, almost everything changes steeply and keeping up with these alterations are crucial for knowing in which directions the
world
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 processes go. In terms of
policial
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political
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finance
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 aspects,
for instance
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,
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 programmes and
newspapers
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 have a significant contribution
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 the
people
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.
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, watching TV
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 and reading
newaspapers
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newspapers
 regularly make
the
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people
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 more conscious and hone their reflections
to
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on
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 what happens in the whole
world
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.
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, the societies which are unwilling to be informed about what is going on
the
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 country they live or in the
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,
they
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consider
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 as
time wasting
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;
therefore
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, leading countries in the
world
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 try to use
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 as a weakness and
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 to keep these countries under their control.
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, it will bring more boundaries and its cost will not be desirable for
people
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 that
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 no idea about the
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. In conclusion, having no connection with
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the vast
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 majority of
people
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 and
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 and
also
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, reading
newspapers
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 and watching TV
news
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 programs are taken as a waste of time by some
people
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. I agree with the circumstance that
vast
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a vast
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 amount of
people
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are
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 informed by TV or
newspapers
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 and following the happenings.
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