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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled.They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governmentsto make it a leagal requirement . To what extent do you think lows are needed to make people recycle more of their waste.

#people #waste #home #governmentsto #requirement #lows
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There are several reasons that I believe it is important for me to accompany
with
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my
husband
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in
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Canada
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: - I do not want to face
distressed
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 situations like I did when my
husband
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 left to study in Denmark. It was very stressful and horrible to
serparate
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separate
 apart from my spouse for years and
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 time I have decided to apply for the spouse visa so we start
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 new journey together. - We can have
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 time together in
Canada
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 and I can
support
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 my
husband
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 in his daily life
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 as shopping and cooking so I can completely focus on his study and achieve the best results. Regarding the financial
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, the current statement in my
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husband
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 account in
Canada
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 is roughly $38000 and he already paid the tuition fee for the
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 term.
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, I
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 have two saving accounts in
Vietnam
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 around $20000 CAD and
a
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property for rent which generate around $320 per month.
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, with
an
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ample
resource
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, it will be sufficient for us to stay in
Canada
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 without working until my
husband
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graduated
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. During my stay in Denmark, I completely obey and respect the rule of
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 country and I did not violate any rules. And I
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 left Denmark before my visa
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expired. While staying in
Canada
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, I would try my best to
support
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 my
husband
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 physically and emotionally
like
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 taking care of
daily
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 house works, going shopping and preparing meals so my
husband
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 can fully concentrate on his study.
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, I would like to become a good resident and take part in volunteer organizations to
support
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 the local authorities as well as improve my English. Regarding our plan after my
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husband
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graduation
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, we plan to come back to
Vietnam
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 as both our parents and loved ones are in
Vietnam
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 and we love to come back to live with them.
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, I
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 own a property in
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 and I wish to come back and grow
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 property in the future. Best regards Nguyen Thi Thuy An
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