The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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These charts explain the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.
In general, the usage of electrical machines has been increasing in the past
around
100 years and Change preposition
apply
consequently
, the workload of housekeeping has been decreasing.
The most notable change is the rising share of refrigerators. Although
the percentage, at the beginning of this
data, was nearly 0 per cent
, it skyrocketed continuously from 1920 to 1960. In 1940 it was almost the same amount of share with other
two appliances. Correct article usage
the other
Besides
, in 1980, it reached 100 per cent
and stayed remain
after that. Wrong verb form
remained
By contrast
, in the early 20th, the washing machine had the top rate out of these three however
, after 1960, the share has been unchanged at around 70 per cent
. Finally
, the popularity of the vacuum cleaner had been steadily climbing until 2000 when it reached 100 per cent
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