Recent advances in medicine have resulted in an increase in life expectancy over the past four years. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

United
Correct article usage
The United
show examples
Kingdom is
the
Change the article
apply
show examples
one
of the highest ranked places for studying MSc in Computer Science. It has
the
Correct article usage
an
show examples
environment suitable for
this
course for there are many prestigious Universities and it provides value for money. Education over there is mostly
research based
Add a hyphen
research-based
show examples
and practical based which is fruitful for students to pursue their
study
Fix the agreement mistake
studies
show examples
. A huge number of work opportunities are there which I can do during my graduation as an intern including in IT sectors, business and other marketing fields and many giant companies hire from there like Google and Microsoft.Affordable healthcare is provided there and has easy access to Europe and has a diverse culture which will give me new experiences in my life and widen my understanding of the
world
which will play a crucial role in my overall growth
This
University
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
is
one
of the best
University
Fix the agreement mistake
universities
show examples
in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
for my concerned course and it is the
university
which
Correct word choice
that
show examples
deals with career focus courses. A high scale of people register for computer science from all over the
world
because of the
Add a hyphen
world-class
show examples
world class
Add a hyphen
world-class
show examples
faculties teaching there and
education
Correct article usage
the education
show examples
there is practical and researched based which will give me to explore more deep and wide into
this
field and give me the creative freedom and I will have these best faculties to guide me. I have always wanted to be in that environment and learn and discuss with them to get maximum benefit in my field which is not possible from distance courses.
Also
one
of the important
reason
Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
show examples
why
this
university
is chosen by me is
because
Replace the word
that
show examples
there are some internship opportunities along with course duration there. India is a huge market for
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
web
developers
and as I have observed India is going to be demanding
web
developers
in future even more. So, my short time goal is to get
job
Add an article
a job
show examples
early so that I can get more and more experience by my
30’s
Change noun form
30s
show examples
. Since there is a lot of demand
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
web
developers
all over the
world
it will not be too difficult to find a job in India for it is
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
one
of the biggest
market
Change to a plural noun
markets
show examples
for
web
developers
. And my long time goal is to start up my own organisation and a company because
then
I will have
a
Change the article
an
show examples
international certificate from a prestigious
university
and a solid
five-years
Correct your spelling
five years
show examples
or more work experience in the
web
and mobile application
developing
Replace the word
development
show examples
market which will give me a proper idea in the field of
web
and mobile development which will make my portfolio quite good and help me grow overall.
Submitted by azone2646 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: