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Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, while others feel it should be purely optional. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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These days
sports
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 have become a necessary part of life many people have started to care greatly about their body health.
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 some adults are concerned about their
children
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's health and think that it is important to have physical education classes while some individuals believe it should be optional. In my point of view, I agree that physical activity is essential nowadays. On the one hand,
sports
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 make
kids
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 healthier and more disciplined. Mostly in school pupils are involved in
sports
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 games
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 as volleyball, basketball, and football due to these activities physical functions are increased but
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 these kinds of
sports
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 support relations among
kids
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 and make them more sociable.
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, pupils who are immersed in
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 are more responsible because of
sports
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 discipline. I agree with
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 statement because I reckon
sports
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 provide mental stability and physical health to
children
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.
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,
children
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 should have the right to choose whether or not to participate in
sports
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. There are some occasions when
kids
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 do not want to take a part in
sports
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 but their parents insist to be play
sports
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. Due to these facts in the future
children
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 will not want to participate in
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 because they may feel disgusted by
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.
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 why it must be an additional subject in schools. To conclude,
sports
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 play a huge role in adults' life as well as in
kids
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' life.
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, both groups of ages must decide to be or not to be a part of it or there will be some troubles.
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