Countries spends large amount of money on sports competitions. Do you think the advantages outweight the disadvantages.

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sports
competition
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by
countries
increased
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these days. In my
opinion
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it has positive and negative sides
however
the
advantages
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influence
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drawbacks.
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with
advantages
,
sport
competiton
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competition
competitions
spread in the world
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people
's
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culture improve by
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.
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people
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sport
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increased
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. Due to
this
rise,
person
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who is more
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healthier
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may be decreased by
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person
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.
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, they prefer to do
sport
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or watch
sport
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competition. In addıtıon
to organize
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sport
competitons
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competitions
contribute importantly to
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country
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economy. Because tourists come from different
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for
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watch and attend.
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hand
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it has some
drawback
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drawbacks
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. Due to huge
sport
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organization
such
as UEFA,
city
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could be
crowded
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advent of
tourist
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tourists
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. Some transportation and accommodation
problem
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problems
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could
be occur
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. Unless government cope with
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problems, disturbing
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situation
situaiton
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situations
probably emerge in terms of the community.
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, it
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rivalry among
countries
. The downside of
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is that
people
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against
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against
each other.
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they are so big fanatic that it
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could
should
be damage to surroundings. In
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conclusion
conckusion
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conclusion
,
countries
should allocate a budget for
sport
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activity.
Although
there are
advantages
and disadvantages,
advantages
is
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considerable for
countries
and
people
. Government should take
actions
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about disadvantages and arrange
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competitions
in
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various
variious
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various
sports branches.
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