Countries spends large amount of money on sports competitions. Do you think the advantages outweight the disadvantages.

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sports

competition

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countries

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these days. In my

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it has positive and negative sides

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advantages

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sport

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competition

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spread in the world

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people

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sport

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culture improve by

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people

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who do

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person

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sport

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sport

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competition. In addıtıon

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sport

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competitons

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competitions

contribute importantly to

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economy. Because tourists come from different

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sport

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organization

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advent of

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probably emerge in terms of the community.

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countries

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should allocate a budget for

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sport

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activity.

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there are

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and disadvantages,

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considerable for

countries

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and

people

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. Government should take

actions

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about disadvantages and arrange

competitons

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competitions

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various

variious

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various

sports branches.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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229 words

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Countries spends large amount of money on sports competitions. Do you think the advantages outweight the disadvantages.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Nowadays, many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think foreign visitors should be charged more than local person when they visit the cultural and historical attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that it is difficult to get children to read. Why do you think this is? What measures could be taken to encourage children to read more?