These days, an increasing number of people in many cities know little about their neighbors and do not have a sense of community. What do you think are the causes and what solutions can you suggest?

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dwellers in the communities usually chatted with each other and help each other as often, there has been a growing trend that the importance of
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between
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weaker. In my opinion, the demands of interacting with
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are less
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essential factor. When asked why they do not socialize with their
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, many people would respond by saying “Why should I? I have many interesting things to do!” indeed, modern technology
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shape a perfect virtual world for most people, they spend way too much spare time on social media or some software for entertainment, which indulges themselves in it. Without the limitation of distance, residents are more willing to contact their friends and family through social media rather than
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.
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trust
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can account for it. Now many
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report too many
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crimes like theft, robbery and murder, which greatly reduce trust between people. They may think that nobody is trustworthy, much less to say their
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. But we all know that sometimes
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help from
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is useful. No matter how convenient using
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phone to solve problems, good relationships with
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can nip in the bud. As part of the solution to the problem, I would suggest communities can organize more interesting activities which can attract residents. At the same time, all media should be fully aware of their share of responsibility in
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city life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • neighbors
  • interaction
  • communication
  • busy and fast-paced lifestyles
  • technology
  • social media
  • community events
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community centers
  • clubs
  • block parties
  • potluck dinners
  • online platforms
  • engagement
  • sense of belonging
  • inclusivity
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