Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe teenagers will have the ability to learn more effectively by watching TV and should
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encouraged to watch more of it regularly at their private residence or school. In
this
essay, I will explain why I do not agree with
this
statement.
Firstly
, letting children watch television on their own would expose them to random content which is not appropriate for their age
as well as
getting view problems at an early age. Youngsters will have access to any kind of movies or shows that could hurt them when they become older.
For instance
, children under 15 years of age have been banned from watching TV in China.
Besides
, experts have done studies that showed that younger viewers’ eyes are more sensitive and will be harmed in the process of staring at the screen.
As a result
, these youngsters will require glasses when they get older since their vision
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worse because of
this
.
Secondly
, broadcast content has
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pure purpose of entertaining and avoiding the process of thinking. kids will have a higher chance of learning more from reading or talking to adults about what is happening in their surroundings than from watching television.
For example
, a study from 2008 that was done in Canada showed that from the ages 1 to 8 years old, children have proven to learn new topics in school by listening to their teacher and asking questions.
In addition
to that, it has been shown that in later years there has increased the number of
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students who spent less time watching TV. In conclusion, there are better options for younger individuals when it comes to gaining new information
such
as reading, processing, and talking about
this
content with others. In saying
this
, I do not agree with the statement above because teaching happens in moments that would benefit them better rather than staring at a screen.
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task response
The essay does not fully address the specific task question and lacks a clear position on the topic. The reasons for disagreeing with the statement are not well developed and lack depth.
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The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. The structure of the essay could be improved by providing a stronger thesis statement and summarizing the main points in the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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