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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way.

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Nowadays, the business world is highly competitive and all companies create strategies to attract more
consumers
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 through advertisements that highlight new features of their
products
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. While there are some disadvantages of
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 trend, I personally feel that the advantages are far more noticeable. On the one hand, several drawbacks can be highlighted here.
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, some corporations develop new characteristics to their
products
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 that do not necessarily mean
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is
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 good for the
consumers
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.
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; the manufacturing of candies uses more and more sugar and adds different
flavors
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 and artificial adds which are not good for human health.
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, the existence of a variety of goods encourages consumerism and spending more money on unnecessary things.
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, Some economic fundamentals state that competition is important for the economic growth of a country, which is the result of the development and improvement of goods and services.
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, not only a new product is an innovation, but
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 improvement itself o value added are considered new
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, new and better goods and services mean more benefits for people.
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, if mobile phone companies hadn`t created smartphones, we haven´t had the possibility of communicating easily with them. In conclusion, it seems to me that the minus points are outweighed by the plus points because even when firms are motivating
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 to spend more money adding new features or making upgrades on the
products
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 might mean an advantage for the economy of a country and benefits for the
consumers
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.
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