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Some believe that it is good having people with extremely high income in the country, while some think the government should try to limit it. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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People
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 who earn high salaries live in some countries today thanks to technological advancements and novel branches of industries more than ever.
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 situation brings some advantages at individual and national levels to some extent, it leads to income differences among
people
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. According to a certain view, governments should put a limit on earnings or profits, there is
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 another view that supports there must be no restriction on
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's wages. I will discuss both these opinions and give my opinion in the
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 paragraph.
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 of all,
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 with high incomes can help the
government
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 in many ways that can not be ignored.
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, a
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 newly formed might struggle with economic problems which are must be solved as quickly as possible.
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 may lead to inequality in reaching educational opportunities among high-income and low-income
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.
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 with high incomes may donate money to non-governmental organizations, public schools, and students individually.
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, wealthy
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 can organize fairs, exhibitions and sports organizations that have the power to enrich the
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 through culture. On the other side, the income gap between affluent and poor
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 may affect the social structure negatively. Poor
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 may think that they have limited power to reach educational or health opportunities.
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, if they do not consider their economic or social situations with reasoning properly, they might blame wealthy
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 for not sharing their fortune.
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, if the rage becomes increasing more, there will be a degeneration problem that can not be solved without academic studies, public awareness and
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 effort. To conclude, it is natural to be a gap between high-income holders and poor
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. Governments which is not in good economic condition must create economic policies that solve primary financial problems and provide a standard life for all citizens.
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, they both gain help from philanthropists and do not encounter poor
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's rage.
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