Many parents (mostly women) decide to stay home and take care of the family members instead of going out for work. Some people suggest that they should be paid by the government for doing that. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

In the modernized and globalised

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it has become

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arduous task for parents to manage both household chores and a job. Nowadays, it is

prefered

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performed

by a plethora of families to

priortise

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prioritise

the needs of their kith and

kins

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and avoid working outside. Some opine that

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ought to give some monetary benefits to these

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homemakers

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. I commend the above notion

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and

afffirm

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affirm

that financial assistance must be provided to the people who choose to watch out

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family

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families

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.

To begin

with, equality among both

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genders would be likely to be seen if government pays

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to

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house managers

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.

Moreover

, the chores at home are quite challenging and devoting full time and energy to the requirements of each family member is

also

cumbersome. In a recent survey,

for example

, it was conducted that if salaries were to be given out, the homemakers would be paid 30 per cent more according to the amount of work they do.

Thus

, the ability to

Furthermore

, a better upbringing of

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generation with full devoted time to them and

also

assist them in

learing

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learning

the household

activties

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activities

.

In addition

to

this

, it is commonly seen that youngsters as well the inlaws staying in

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family have to be paid more attention as they become more demanding at times. The

kins

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kids

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need to have a better

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perspective

pespective

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perspective

of the future and learn how to overcome emotional issues in their future and

this

could only be comprehended by their parents. In conclusion, in my perspective,

although

some individuals believe that

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exorbitant

expenses would be spent on paying

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traditional duties of women,

this

would make them independent and will

also

do their duty diligently.