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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

#people #media #sites #facebook #twitter #impact #ability #form #relationships
New technology has
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effected
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affected
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 our lives in different ways. There are always pros and cons
of
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 everything.
The social
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media
sites
 have a huge impact on human beings. Some
people
 take it positively but others think that these
sites
 have played a negative role in youngster's life. In my eye,
twitter
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 and
facebook
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Facebook
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 have both advantages and disadvantages.
To begin
 with, social
media
 has many benefits,
such
 as it keeps
people
 connected in their busy lives, especially when everyone is moving abroad in the race
of
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for
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better
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a better
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 future. I have many school and college
friends
 whom I found on social
media
. It is a great feeling to be reconnected
to
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with
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 my old
friends
.
Also
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people
 share so many knowledgeable posts on
internet
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 which can be beneficial for any one of us.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
of
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to
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 social
sites
 as well. Many folks share unethical content on their profile to get more likes and views. On
the
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social
networking
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 we can add
people
 from anywhere in the world,
it
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 can
also
 put
the
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younger
people
into
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in
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dangerous
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a dangerous
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situation
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situations
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. Like, they come to know
the
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their
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 personal information,
their
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and their
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 weakness. So,
the
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youngsters
needs
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 to be aware of social
media
friends
. They should know only real
friends
 are the
one
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ones
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 to trust on. To conclude, I will say social
sites
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sites'
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 advantages can overweigh disadvantages if they
used
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are used
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 wisely.
The social
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Social
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 network is a great place to learn new things but just be aware
to
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of making
friends
 on social websites.
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