More and more schools allow fast-food restaurants to sell their products to their students. Is it a positive or negative development
In recent times, a majority of
school
children have addicted to fast food
consumption, because these foods
are taste and low price
, while Wrong verb form
priced
school
administration give
permission for restaurants to provide their ready-made Change the verb form
gives
foods
to students. Although
, these foods
have adverse consequences, In this
essay, I will discuss both of advantages and disadvantages.
On the one hand, the main positive factor is providing fast food
at schools, it easy to provides
Wrong verb form
provide
student
without any hesitation, because these types of meals could Fix the agreement mistake
students
prepare
rapidly compared to traditional meals, they can make these Wrong verb form
prepared
foods
quickly if they need, whereby students could buy food
at school
restaurant and save their time not preparing foods
at home. For instance
, there is no add
effort and time consumed for making fast Replace the word
additional
foods
. In addition
, another reason is that schoolchildren consider fast food
consumption, they are so delicious and affordable because students prefer to purchase fast foods
.
On the other hand
, the negative impact of allowing to selling preservative
Change preposition
of preservative
foods
at schools is that the person with a bigger appetite,
Remove the comma
apply
is
Correct your spelling
it
encourages
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encouraged
them
to consume, which leads to many health-related problems Correct pronoun usage
apply
such
as obesity, diabetes and cholesterol. Because these foods
are usually cooked in fat, which makes these
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this food calorie-dense
food
calorie-dense and eating them can lead to undesirable weight gain, especially growing children could negatively affect their life. As a result
, they become lazy and deprives
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deprived
physical
activities, Change preposition
of physical
it
can affect their education. Correct pronoun usage
which
For example
, according to a study, numerous children have been diagnosed with diabetes, because consume excessive sweet junk foods
In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic, fast food
has several benefits through allowing to sell foods
at school
. However
, it also
has disadvantages, the school
administration should implement the best plan to reduce negative effects in
student's health through consuming fast Change preposition
on
foods
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