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More and more schools allow fast-food restaurants to sell their products to their students. Is it a positive or negative development

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In recent times, a majority of
school
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 children have addicted to fast
food
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 consumption, because these
foods
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 are taste and low
price
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, while
school
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 administration
give
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 permission for restaurants to provide their ready-made
foods
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 to students.
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, these
foods
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 have adverse consequences, In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both of advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, the main positive factor is providing fast
food
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 at schools, it easy to
provides
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student
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students
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 without any hesitation, because these types of meals could
prepare
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 rapidly compared to traditional meals, they can make these
foods
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 quickly if they need, whereby students could buy
food
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 at
school
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 restaurant and save their time not preparing
foods
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 at home.
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, there is no
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 effort and time consumed for making fast
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.
In addition
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, another reason is that schoolchildren consider fast
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 consumption, they are so delicious and affordable because students prefer to purchase fast
foods
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. ​
On the other hand
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, the negative impact of allowing to selling
preservative
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foods
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 at schools is that the person with a bigger appetite
,
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is
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encourages
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them
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to consume, which leads to many health-related problems
such
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 as obesity, diabetes and cholesterol. Because these
foods
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 are usually cooked in fat, which makes
these
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this food calorie-dense
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food
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 calorie-dense and eating them can lead to undesirable weight gain, especially growing children could negatively affect their life.
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, they become lazy and
deprives
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physical
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 activities,
it
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which
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 can affect their education.
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, according to a study, numerous children have been diagnosed with diabetes, because consume excessive sweet junk
foods
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 ​In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic, fast
food
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 has several benefits through allowing to sell
foods
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 at
school
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.
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, it
also
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 has disadvantages, the
school
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 administration should implement the best plan to reduce negative effects
in
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 student's health through consuming fast
foods
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