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These days, people work in more than one job and often change carrier several times during their life. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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In the modern era, many many kinds want to
work
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 in more than
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 job.
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, often they change
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 career many times in their
life
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. As every garden
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it's
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 weeds,
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this
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 situation is both benefits as well as drawbacks and
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 essay will
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 both
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aspects. To commence with the views of advantages,
one
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 of the major plus
point
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 of
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work
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 in more than
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 job is the fact that everybody wants to leave a
luxury
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life
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 in the contemporary Era, but it is not possible without a proper income. So
that
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, they accept many careers in their
life
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 to improve their standard and lifestyle.
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, teachers can teach in
school
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 in the morning and they
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 teach in the evening as a home
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 to extend their salary.
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 survey found that in developed countries like the USA and England people have more
capable
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 to do many kinds of
work
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 because they are
fully
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as
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accepted and have a lot of skills. Shifted towards a view of disagreement, it is observed that if
one
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 person can do a lot of activities and change their career in their
life
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. So, it is directly affected on future. Because they
not
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 have
a
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proper
work
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 experience and every company wants
to
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that type of employee
which
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give
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 their proper attention
on
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work
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.
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, if
individual
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an individual
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 can perform many occupations and have not
leisture
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leisure
 time for other activities. They may be got depressed and
do
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not able to spend time with their family. To conclude
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this
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, I believe that
it's
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 negatives are overlapping
by
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 its positive because everybody
have
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 to choose
one
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 carrier and improve
itself
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 in
one
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 field. Due to
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, they can
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 increase their output and have some free time for other sports activities.
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