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Nowadays, a lot of offices have open-space designs instead of separate rooms. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#offices #open-space #designs #rooms
It is believed that many modern offices are now adopting open spaces
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 working areas for
employees
. While some would say that
such
 a setting can increase distractions as well as pose a risk to
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employee
. In my opinion, I
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 affirm that building
such
 spaces will be
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beneficial
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beneficial
 due to the rise in efficiency. On the one hand, working in a communal space easily drives one to distraction.
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social
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experiment
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 from noises of phone calls to colleagues conversing an employee faces loads of disturbances that can cost them their
work
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efficiency
. It can be seen that
this
 constant background noise may be seen as a source of distraction, disabling
employees
 to focus on their
work
.
On the other hand
, the layout of open space will be much more
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beneficial
 for the company
such
 as
employees
 can interact more frequently with each other which
faciliates
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facilitates
 internal communication within the organization.
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, in labour newspaper opening space will help to establish a harmonious workplace, creating mutual understanding among employers. It can be seen that creating a communication environment for
employees
 can improve
work
 efficiency. In conclusion, I believe that the
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advantages
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advantages
 of open plan offices
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outweigh
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outweigh
drawbacks
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.
This
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work
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