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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the present age, most
people
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 have an opportunity to get a higher education.
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, some of them choose not to, and after graduation, they start working at various places. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views and state my opinion. To start with, in the
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 year of
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 every teenager is encouraged to apply to a university or college and get their degree.
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 why a vast number of students choose to study there. They are convinced, that it is the best way to ensure a bright future for themselves because it is well known that employers are more willing to give you the position of employment if you have finished any sort of
school
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 of higher education. Your degree shows that you are a better expert in a certain field and can do some tasks, which most
people
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 can’t.
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, studying at a university helps you develop some exceptional competencies, that not many
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 have.
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, not all young human beings share the same view. Some of them believe, that it is useless to spend a few years studying and learning how things work only in theory, which is what most schools of higher education are offering. Those
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 choose to enter the labour market and gain needed skills in a practical way, which is considered to be more beneficial amongst some
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. They share a view that theoretical knowledge will not help you in the real world when you start working, and that practical experience is the key.
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 why a fair share of students choose to start working straight after finishing
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. Overall, as humans, only we know what is best for us – spending those 3 or 4 years in a university or college or getting a job straight after
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. I believe that both of these options can be beneficial for a young person, trying to find his own path, but I personally am in favour of the former view, and I think that it is better to learn some thin
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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