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The percentage of 3 types of crimes: car theft, house burglary & street robbery in England & Wales from 1970 to 2015

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The given line chart depicts information about the percentages of three separate types of crime (
car
theft
,
house
 burglary and street robbery) committed in two countries during the
years
 between 1970 and 2000. Overall, the most striking feature of the graph is that the percentage of
car
 thefts witnessed the most dramatic change and was always higher than that of the other two crime categories during the surveyed period. In more detail, in 1970, the proportion of
car
theft
 accounted for exactly 0.4%, slightly higher than that of
house
 burglary, at approximately 0.3%.
Car
theft
 rates witnessed a significant rise of 0.4% in the
next
 five
years
 before soaring to a peak of 1.4% in 1985, which was
also
 the highest figure for all crimes and
years
 in the chart. Meanwhile, the figures for
house
 burglaries increased gradually to just under 0.4% in the initial ten
years
 before climbing to precisely 0.6% in 1990. There was a remarkable fall to 0.8% and 0.4% in the data for
car
theft
 and
house
 burglary, respectively. Figures for street robbery ,
however
, remained practically unchanged over the
years
, fluctuating slightly, between approximately 0.1% to 0.18%.
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