Individual greed and selfishness have been the basis of modern society. Some people think that we must return to the older and more traditional values of respect for the family and the local community in order to create a better world to live in, To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, avarice and egotism have been rooted in individual
life
. It is considered that holding the traditional and ancestor principles is the best approach to make better social life
, particularly in value of respect both to family members and to society
. I firmly agree about that solution due to some justifications, such
as maintaining family harmony and increasing the sense of solidarity in society
.
The foremost reason is to maintain unity in the households. It is clear that family is the closest people that usually give us the hands to help us if we have severe conditions. Respecting them, can increase their empathy for us and maintain harmonious relationships among family members. Thus
, when someone has sadness or serious problems they can assist us to gain a solution. For instance
, when the family has a medical need that requires much money to get medication in the hospital, giving them financial assistance, of course, can lead them happy so that in the future they can also
do the same to help us.
In addition
, becoming greedy and selfish individuals can get jeered by the community. Because social life
is inclined to uphold solidarity values among them. Meanwhile, selfishness and egotism are far from the basis of solidarity itself. Consequently
, not only will be they avoided by society
, but also
they can get negative attitudes as well. Taking Pancasila as the ideology of Indonesia as an example. From the beginning, when Soekarno proposed his ideas about national basis (Pancasila), he mentioned that unity in the diversity is the biggest reason behind the five principles of Pancasila, so that those who do not follow that, represent that they do not want to become social members of Indonesia.
To summarise, to make a better life
in humanity or family, maintaining our respect and sympathy for them is salient because it can make harmony in the family and lead make unity in society
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
