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It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#money #friend #harm #damage #friendship
Thought out history and in today's contemporary era the value of friendship cannot be overestimated, we are lucky if we have faithful
friends
 in our lives,
therefore
 friendship should always be maintained meticulously.
However
, I agree that
,
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 a few things
such
 as borrowing
money
 from
friends
 sometimes can harm the relationship, it's not always innocuous. I think
this
 way for two reasons, which I will discuss in
this
 essay.
Firstly
,
to begin
 with, I strongly believe that the base of any relationship is trusting and staunch. Borrowing
money
 can sometimes affect
this
,
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 when we are not able to return the
amount
 at a time. My own personal experience is a compelling example of
this
, it was the time when I just joined the office and one day my colleague come to me for some help. He need some
amount
 of
money
, I trusted him and gave him the
amount
 he need. Now, it has been more than a year and he never talks about
this
. His work for which he needs
money
, has been done perfectly and the situation is
also
 fine for him, but I am still waiting for my
money
.
Secondly
, I feel that there are so many other options available in the market if someone requires
money
such
 as
through
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a bank loan.
For example
, a few months ago, I want to buy a car but I didn't have so much
money
. I decided to take a loan from a bank
instead
 to get it from my friend. I get loans very easily with EMI.
As a result
, 70 per cent of
payment
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of
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 my car has been completed and within a few
months
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 I will complete all left
amount
.
This
 way, I never have to ask any of my
friends
 for
money
 and enjoy my car enthusiastically. In conclusion, I would like to say that, to maintain a healthy relationship with our
friends
 it's better to avoid borrowing
money
 from them,
instead
 should think about other options available in the market.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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