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You recently enjoyed a meal at an expensive restaurant, and you were impressed with the good service you received. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter • explain the circumstances of your visit to the restaurant • describe the service you received • say what you would like the manager to do Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that I have recently visited your
restaurant
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, and I really love your delicious meals, which are delicately prepared.
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, your
restaurant
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 service was incredible, which shows your respect for your customers
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 are an integral part of your
restaurant
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. My wife and I were looking for a
restaurant
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 where we would enjoy our food and service on an application we used.
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 we saw your
restaurant
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 at the top of the list
that is
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 prepared based on the food-lovers' recommendations.
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, we decided immediately to visit your diners. At the time, when we entered the
restaurant
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, the host welcomed us eagerly, and they showed us to our table kindly. They explain the menu you have very deliberatly and they request that we try some new kind of starter before we start the main dishes. It was really fascinated services I have ever had. In light of the above, I would like to thank you and your amazing team that enable us to taste those delicious foods we have never tried. You could do more advertising about your
restaurant
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 because we didn't know it existed before we searched on the application. It would be more beneficial for you and for individuals who are seeking a high-quality
restaurant
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. Kind regards, Ibrahim.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but the last part is a bit weak. Say more clearly what you want the manager to do.
task response
Task response: Your tone is warm and polite, but some lines are too long and not fully clear.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. But some ideas can be linked in a simpler way.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your letter easier to follow.
task response
Task response: You cover the visit, the service, and your wish to the manager.
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Task response: The purpose of the letter is clear from the first paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your greeting and closing are correct for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The order of ideas is easy to understand most of the time.
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