Parents nowadays delay childbirth. Does it advantages overweight the disadvantages give your opinion.

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Owing to the burgeoning awareness women give
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to their careers. It is believed by some people that in the present situation
parents
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are delaying childbirth.
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the merits as well as demerits of
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late in
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in the subsequent fragments. Irrefutably, there are a plethora of pros of
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children
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but the vital two are better career
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and
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gender equally work. To
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with the former, most
youngsters
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are giving
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to their career opportunities like better jobs, economically strong and many more.
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people like to work far away from their family because they can achieve their dreams and steadily climb in
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of career;
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,
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marry late
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in
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and delay child.
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to their professional
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in their
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. Another reason is that
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presently
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males and females get work and support their families. Not only do men focus on their job promotion but
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Females have a lot of job choices. Thereby, society is becoming
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financially and open-minded
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, despite the various positive aspects of child delay it still has some
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also
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like
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issues as well as lack of parenting.
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, many
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get a chance of
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,especially after 30 age but it creates some serious issues for
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such
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as a miscarriage, high blood pressure and so on.
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is the reason,
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cannot expand their
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easily and they need a lot of medical care.
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, presently many moms
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birth to
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before nine months which is not good for
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's
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.
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, many
children
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can lack better development.
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,
both
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parents
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are working and they don't give full time to their
children
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and parenting.
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, parenting care is essential nowadays because during growth
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need
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to need
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support from their
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.
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, lack of parenting directly
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children
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's
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and mental issues. To recapitulate, many
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have
children
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after 30age but if
parents
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will take some steps to overcome the shortcoming of
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a delayed
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child its advantages overweigh its disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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