ESSAY : 2 – CHILDREN ARE FACING MORE PRESSURE NOWADAYS ACADEMIC, SOCIAL AND COMMERCIAL PERSPECTIVES. WHAT ARE THE CAUSES OF THESE PRESSURES AND WHAT MEASURES SHOULD BE TAKEN TO REDUCE THESE PRESSURE?

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companies, so it is
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biggest reason student get more mental pressure and stress to get a good job and score high.
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selected in the company interview internship and for going abroad.
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instance,
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make some good
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student
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not only getting mental pressure and
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to score good, so companies get better
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workers .
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explain it, Google ,
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are big companies but
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skill more than scores and it
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than to get better employment.
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. In conclusion, education and the individual building stress on the kids but authorities and academic sector like school universities should bhi try to solve the
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to kids.
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