The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children ? Do you think this the best way to deal the problem ? what other solutions can you suggest ?

In
this
contemporary epoch, schools should be considerably raised the amount of time on several kinds of indoor and outdoor
sports
as well as
exercise
to minimise the overweight
problem
of
children
. In my perspective, there are numerous other ways to solve
this
problem
which are
also
effective. In
this
essay, I will elaborate on my visions in the forthcoming paragraphs with effective examples.
To begin
with, schools and other educational institutions should be increased the amount of time on different kinds of physical practice for the purpose of solving the overweight
problem
of
children
.
Moreover
, It has several merits not only reducing the excess weight
problem
but
also
keeping their body fit and healthy.
Sports
and
exercise
are crucial for everyone they remove our monotonous and
gives
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us so much pleasure.
For instance
, when the school play an important role in physical
exercise
for their pupils which
also
be a habit in their future.
In addition
to
this
,
students
also
keep their attention on studying and they feel come back to their school.
In addition
to
this
, educational institutions arrange regular
sports
competitions among
students
which
also
encourage them in
sports
.
On the other hand
, there are
numorous
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numerous
others way
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other ways
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to tackle
this
problem
such
as eat hygiene food along with
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proper rules in daily
life
which is
also
benificial
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beneficial
for pupils. Every
students
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student
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should eat healthy food and make
it
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its
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practices
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in their
life
.
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Moreover
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Moreover
,
students
also
follow
proper
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a proper
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lifestyle
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life style
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for
examles
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example
examples
, maintain sleeping like going to bed early and wake up early
at
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the morning. To cite an example, when a student
maintain
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hygience
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hygiene
hygienic
food in their
life
and follow regular health
exercise
such
as running on
treadmill
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a treadmill
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which
also
reduce
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their overweight and keeps their body fit and healthy. There
are
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also
various
others practice
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other practices
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that
also
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are also
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effective in
children
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children's
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life
.
Children
go to
nearby
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a nearby
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field
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fields
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with their siblings and friends for playing
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different
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differents
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different
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sport
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sports
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like soccer,cricket,
bedminton
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badminton
and so on which
also
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are also
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effective to solve their overweight problems along with
build
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their leadership
quality
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qualities
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, disciple,
time
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and time
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management skills. In a nutshell, to recapitulate the aforementioned arguments into deep consideration,
i
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would like to restate that school solve
overweight
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the overweight
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problem
of
children
by taking
obove
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above
steps and
this
is
best
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the best
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way to solve
this
problem
. There are
also
several
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effective
effectives
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effective
way
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ways
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which
also
beneficial for
students
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • physical education
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • nutrition education
  • healthy eating habits
  • balanced meals
  • junk food
  • parental involvement
  • community initiatives
  • fitness programs
  • government policies
  • subsidies
  • multi-dimensional approach
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