The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children ? Do you think this the best way to deal the problem ? what other solutions can you suggest ?
In
this
contemporary epoch, schools should be considerably raised the amount of time on several kinds of indoor and outdoor sports
as well as exercise
to minimise the overweight problem
of children
. In my perspective, there are numerous other ways to solve this
problem
which are also
effective. In this
essay, I will elaborate on my visions in the forthcoming paragraphs with effective examples.
To begin
with, schools and other educational institutions should be increased the amount of time on different kinds of physical practice for the purpose of solving the overweight problem
of children
. Moreover
, It has several merits not only reducing the excess weight problem
but also
keeping their body fit and healthy. Sports
and exercise
are crucial for everyone they remove our monotonous and gives
us so much pleasure. Correct subject-verb agreement
give
For instance
, when the school play an important role in physical exercise
for their pupils which also
be a habit in their future. In addition
to this
, students
also
keep their attention on studying and they feel come back to their school. In addition
to this
, educational institutions arrange regular sports
competitions among students
which also
encourage them in sports
.
On the other hand
, there are numorous
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numerous
others way
to tackle Fix the agreement mistake
other ways
this
problem
such
as eat hygiene food along with maintain
proper rules in daily Change the verb form
maintaining
life
which is also
benificial
for pupils. Every Correct your spelling
beneficial
students
should eat healthy food and make Change to a singular noun
student
it
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its
practices
in their Wrong verb form
practised
life
. Correct your spelling
Moreover
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Moreover
students
also
follow proper
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a proper
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lifestyle
life style
for Correct your spelling
lifestyle
examles
, maintain sleeping like going to bed early and wake up early Correct your spelling
example
examples
at
the morning. To cite an example, when a student Change preposition
in
maintain
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maintains
hygience
food in their Correct your spelling
hygiene
hygienic
life
and follow regular health exercise
such
as running on treadmill
which Add an article
a treadmill
also
reduce
their overweight and keeps their body fit and healthy.
There Change the verb form
reduces
are
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is
also
various others practice
that Fix the agreement mistake
other practices
also
effective in Add a missing verb
are also
children
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children's
life
. Children
go to nearby
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a nearby
field
with their siblings and friends for playing Fix the agreement mistake
fields
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different
differents
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different
sport
like soccer,cricket, Fix the agreement mistake
sports
bedminton
and so on which Correct your spelling
badminton
also
effective to solve their overweight problems along with Add a missing verb
are also
build
their leadership Change the verb form
building
quality
, disciple, Fix the agreement mistake
qualities
time
management skills.
In a nutshell, to recapitulate the aforementioned arguments into deep consideration, Correct word choice
and time
i
would like to restate that school solve Change the capitalization
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overweight
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the overweight
problem
of children
by taking obove
steps and Correct your spelling
above
this
is best
way to solve Change the article
the best
this
problem
. There are also
several Correct your spelling
effective
effectives
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effective
way
which Fix the agreement mistake
ways
also
beneficial for students
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