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Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport and dirty water. Do you think that governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodation to restrict today’s tourism industry?

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Travelling today is simple to the extent that within twelve hours one can travel from Europe to Singapore, crossing nearly the whole globe. Based on
this
 simplicity,
tourism
 has changed significantly over the years. While in the past a family would be proud to drive two hours to a lake, many families now think nothing of travelling to the far side of the world.
This
also
 has a downside as increased
pollution
 is a result. Extra
taxes
 on flights or
accommodation
 have
therefore
 been offered as a solution so as to increase the cost of
tourism
 and reduce its popularity. No matter what major transportation is used, travelling creates
pollution
. To decrease the amount of
pollution
 caused by
tourism
, the
tourism
 industry itself would have to be weakened. If these increased
taxes
 are based on travelling distance, people would be more willing to stay closer to their home country, as for many even a slight increase would mean that their planned holidays would be too expensive.
Accommodation
taxes
 would raise holiday costs no matter the distance travelled.
Therefore
, if increased
taxes
 were levied on travel and
accommodation
,
tourism
 and
therefore
pollution
 would decrease.
On the other hand
, the main transport methods that would be impacted by imposing extra
taxes
 would be communal ones,
such
 as planes, trains and buses, and increasing the
taxes
 would
also
 impact non-tourists.
Also
, holidays are a vital part of ordinary people’s lives, as they escape from work and stress, and get to spend valuable time with their families. Stopping people travelling would greatly impact some simple pleasures of ordinary life. In conclusion, while
tourism
 impacts the environment significantly, simply introducing extra
taxes
 on transport or
accommodation
 is a drastic measure. It could be more valuable to change the methods of transportation to decrease
pollution
,
instead
making
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 people stay close to home.
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