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Some people think university education is important for getting a job while others believe it is more important to have experience and soft skills. discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, more and more people believe that getting work experience and having skills are more important than graduating from a university.
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, it depends on the job. I believe that
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third level
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third-level
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 education is necessary
in
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 fields that require a high level of knowledge,
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 as medical, engineering and information technology.
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get
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 a preferable job. It is obvious that people who graduate from
higher ranked
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higher-ranked
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 universities have a higher chance of getting
high paid
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high-paid
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jobs
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, BBC surveys found that 98 per cent of students who completed their universities in Oxford had received
jobs
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 in
top
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 50 companies, with an average annual salary of 200,000 pounds.
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, going to universities will help them to have more connections than high school students, and it would
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 broaden their global vision. Overall, it is true that degrees are a significant part of success.
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, people who have skills and work experience can
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 get satisfying
jobs
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,
jobs
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 like chefs, truck drivers and barbers do not require a high education level, but rather abilities.
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, one of my best friends, Thomas, who did not go to university, is currently the richest one among us.
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, he is an entrepreneur
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 and has owned more than 10 bar branches now.
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, the probability of
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 case is low, so getting a degree is the best way to work. In conclusion, applying for a job requires both skills and a diploma. A certificate in tertiary education is more essential as when they are applying to a multinational company, they will not receive a chance to interview if they do not have at least a bachelor’s degree.
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, going to a university can benefit students and their careers are more likely to be successful.
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