Your friends recently moved to a new city. You will also be moving to the same city. Write a letter to your friends and include: - Ask where to find a place to live - Tell them what type of place you’re looking for - Share some fun things you would like to do when you get there Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses

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Dear Parneet, I hope you and your family are doing well. I am writing

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letter to share the good news with you that I have got a job transfer to Toronto where you just moved in recently. First of all, as you know, finding a place was never my cup of tea. But still, can you suggest some good websites where I can find a suitable place to live

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there are a number of rental scams going on and you are the only person who can help me.

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, I am looking for accommodation in the city centre as I will be working in the downtown area.

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, a one-bedroom apartment will be enough for me and my wife. Not only, do I need a place which is affordable, but I

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want to be closer to any gym and grocery store.

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, I found out that there are several places where we can enjoy fun activities, especially taking rides at Canada’s Wonderland.

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, we will watch some movies together and share our old-school memories. I am very excited to meet you after a long time. See you soon, Warm regards, Manpreet

Submitted by Manpreet Singh on Thu Dec 19 2024

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph addresses a single main idea and flows naturally to the next.

Task Achievement

You have addressed all parts of the task effectively. Consider adding more details for a richer response.

Task Achievement

Your letter maintains a friendly and suitable tone throughout, which is perfect for a letter to friends.

Coherence and Cohesion

The letter is well structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

Task Achievement

You have provided specific details about the type of accommodation you're looking for and activities you want to do.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

195 words

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