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Crimes and other kinds of information on television and newspaper have adverse consequences. This kind of information to be restricted to be shown in media. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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The advancement of technology has altered the way people live. Many kinds of
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 come up on media and
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 as crimes and other severe cases. It is perceived that
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 kind of
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 should be filtered.
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, I completely disagree about that statement due to some justifications.
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 essay will elucidate to get a better comprehension. Human beings have a tendency to become worried about the circumstances in their milieu, while
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 and
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 become the primary source to attain up-to-date and real
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, whether it is crimes or general conditions which happen in our country.
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, restricting these kinds of
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 will make them look for the issue without any validity,
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 as hoaxes or false
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, recently, Indonesian attain the
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 about a murder case of Joshua
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 committed by one of the
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 police, Ferdy Sambo. If Indonesian only consumed the
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 from social media, they might not know the reality that it is
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 case because the
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 time,
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 issue was only about conflict among police and sexual abuse.
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, the
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 can confirm the actual accident.
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, negative issues
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 as crime have a piece of positive advice for the public.
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 is because the
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also
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 has educational content and some purposes for society. Once they get
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 about crimes, it can be grasped as
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 on what not to do, particularly for young generations. Meanwhile, for some students,
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 can be
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 in terms of academic knowledge.
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,law students can learn the processes and newest
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 about the crime until the criminals are jailed. To summarise, some severe
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 on
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 and newspaper has not to be restricted because it can become primary resources for society who has big curiosity and can be the source of knowledge and beneficial insight for some of them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Desensitize: To make someone less likely to feel shock or distress at scenes of cruelty or suffering by overexposure to such images.
  • Sensationalism: The use of exciting or shocking stories at the expense of accuracy, to provoke public interest or excitement.
  • Media Ethics: Principles and standards of conduct relating to the role and responsibilities of press and broadcast professionals.
  • Perception: The way in which something is regarded, understood, or interpreted.
  • Ignorance: Lack of knowledge or information.
  • Balance in Reporting: Presenting both sides of an issue or argument to provide a fair understanding.
  • Preparedness: A state of readiness, especially for unexpected events or emergencies.
  • Social Learning Theory: A theory that suggests people learn from observing others, including the behaviors, attitudes, and outcomes of those behaviors.
  • PTSD (Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder): A mental health condition triggered by experiencing or witnessing a terrifying event.
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