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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems.as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is true that immigrants who do not speak the native
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 of a
country
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 can
cause
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 a number of problems. I strongly agree with
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 statement because it can
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 miscommunication in many situations
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 as educational and social. The population who does not speak the mother tongue of a
country
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 can
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 uncomfortable situations for themselves and for others. It could occur in educational institutes
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 as colleges or universities that conduct classes in their native
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, where the students will not be able to understand their lectures,
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 they will not be able to discuss their doubts with their friends or teachers. Eventually,
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 will lead to poor grades.
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 to
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, the problem will occur in other situations
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 as discussing rent or going for a medical check-up.
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, I remember a patient that did not speak the
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 of our
country
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, and it was difficult for her as well for the staff to perform different tests on her.
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 miscommunication can lead to people becoming vulnerable to fraud and different cons.
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,
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 can
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 embarrassment for them.
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, they will have difficulty in doing basic shopping
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 as grocery shopping because they will not be able to understand the vendor.
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 could lead to serious problems like not understanding road signs which can
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 traffic accidents. In the same way, the migrated population will not be able to understand different warnings.
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, flood warnings or hurricane warnings that could lead to devastating consequences . In conclusion, I would like to say that before immigration the public should be given basic knowledge about the
language
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 of the
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,
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 it will
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 a lot of practical and social problems
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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