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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1
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 par chart
depict
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 the figure of
hours
 each teacher spent teaching in various schools in
Japan
,
Spain
,Iceland and The United States in 2001. It is clear from the graph that,
U.S.A
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the U.S.A
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 had
higher
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a higher
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 rate in
different
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a different
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category
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 in 2001.
According to
 what is shown, the primary school group is taken the
similer
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similar
behavior
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 in
Spain
 and The United States compared with
Japan
 had exactly 600
nember
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number
 of
hours
. Meanwhile, Iceland had slightly decreased
around
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 398
number of
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hours
. On other hand, lower secondary in
Japan
 and
Spain
 had increased between 610 and 650 figure of
hours
.
while
,
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U.S.A
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the U.S.A
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 had
moreover
 900
nember
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number
 of
hours
. The upper secondary in The United States
increase
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 significantly near
from
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1200
nember
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number
 of
hours
.
Whereas
with
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Spain
 and Iceland had 900 and slightly over to 905
nember
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number
 of
hours
.
To sum up
, we could say that,
Japan
in general
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 had
less
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fewer
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nember
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number
 of
hours
compered
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compared
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 with
another countries
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another country
other countries
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 in 2001.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, japan, spain, nember with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts
  • number of hours
  • teaching
  • schools
  • countries
  • 2001
  • teachers
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • overview
  • average
  • year
  • difference
  • significant
  • range
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