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Writing Samples
Band 4

Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

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the
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modern life, with the development of technology and
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Internet
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is
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available
availible
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available
 everywhere, everyone can know about the world through
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. It’s sometimes argued that
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newspaper
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 are still the most vital source of
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. In my opinion, I totally disagree with the statement. There are many reasons why reading
news
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 on the
Internet
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 is more populous than that on newspapers.
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, the
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 updated on the
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are
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 fast, within
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 minutes I can hear
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news
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 in other countries.
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, reading
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 online is cheap,
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, today almost family has technology
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smartphone
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, television, computer, etc, so whenever they can update the
news
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. I think
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news
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 on the
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 is
advangeous
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advantageous
dangerous
. I believe that newspapers don’t benefit us at all.
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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are
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 brought out
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 at least 1-2 days,
this
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 can lead to an outcome of not hearing
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news
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at
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time
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, the government need to announce urgent
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, but
few
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 days later, the residents no longer know about it.
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,
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 are costless, we need to pay for it In conclusion, my view is that
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 is more disadvantageous than reading
news
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 online.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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