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Somepeople say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to.How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?Give reasons for your answer and incl

#somepeople #tourism #effects #countries #people #travel #tourists #cultures #environments #incl
It is believed, that pieces of advice really influence
on
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customer’s
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 and make them
buying
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 things.
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 believe, that advertising is ignored by everyone. I completely concur with
this
 view.
Firstly
, society stopped
pay
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 attention to
the
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advertising, for the reason that it is so common. When you see one
advertising
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 everywhere, it is becoming really annoying and
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the person
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person
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 just
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 it.
For instance
, when we see
the
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 advertisement every day, we will stop
mention
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 it at all. If
person
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 wants something, he will obviously buy it without commercial.
Secondly
, mainly, products from commercial have not good quality. Even if they
high-quality
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, they
overpriced
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, because
whole
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 money
wasted
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for
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 too expensive
commercial
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commercials
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.
On the other hand
, advertisement has
really
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 great influence on people. Not everyone can find, where he or she can buy critical useful goods, and commercial in
this
 case really helps.
However
, I
am not share
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this
 point of view, because
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, where you can buy,
for example
, rare
product
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products
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, you can search
in
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 the Internet. To sum up, I consider, that advertising lost it is popularity, and society
do
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 not pay attention
on
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 it, since it is really annoying and not always corresponded to
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expectation.
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